homework#25

To Yazmin:

Yazy-yaz

i like how you described your character as someone everybody wants, and yet didnt make her a completely idiot or bitch, like most people do do when they think of "cool" people. Its refreshing.
I also like the last line you used "she's everything i want to be and yet nothing i can be", kind of poetic, nice way to end it.


To Chloe:

Chloe

i enjoy you're story alot, its a true SOF definition of cool, the whole elevator thing. I know that's happen to me a number of times so i can really connect to it.
I also like how it never got boring even tho it was just about one scene.


To Jin:

I like how your story still says alot even though its kind of short. I really liked the part where the character speaks to himself in the mirror, almost like to reassure himself that he is cool, i thought that was cool.
and the gold part kind of reminds me of someone whose showing off their high status in society, like hes showing off how cool he is.


To Connor:

I really liked your story,
I like how you used more dialogue than description like how most others do. I like how you use alot of slang in your post, not all the other blogs had that much slang in it, and it made your story enjoyable.


To Samantha Cotto:

Your story reminded me alot of the scene from "feed" where all the girls went to the bathroom to change their hairstyle because there was a new "it" style.
I like how you start off embarrassing the character instead of telling everyone how cool he is.
Also his name, you know how the cool people usually make up weird words/names, and just say them all the time, i guess that connects with coolness and at the same time is a name where people can make fun of him, i like that, and im mad you actually used it lol.




Some patterns i've notice while reading everyone's story, were that usually the people we think are "cool" are jerks, like in Connors story, the main character was a complete ass, and just started things no matter what, for pure entertainment. Also the value of things, like new clothes, shoes, style comes up alot, which is a given since everybody's opinion on style is different, it can be more dark like chloes or hip like in Samantha's.
Also beauty has a part of it too, like in Yazmin's the story the character was all lovely, everybody desired her, wanted to be like her. Also like in jin's story, the character makes himself look good so that people would like him. In Chloes the characters more non-caring, yet that emotionless facade is appealing to people, not as much as beauty, but makes a person look cool.